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楼主，我又来了。你这篇文章写的比之前的那两个好很多了哇，你挺努力的哟，提升这么快。。。

那我就继续来给你抓语法了哈，哈哈｀｀｀

1. group  who。。。  你用which吧，我觉得group这里虽然指代的是人，但是毕竟它本身还不是人噻。

2. had a sharp fall to near a quarter。感觉这句没完整，但没错哈。你说跌落到四分之一，到底是啥子时候的四分之一呢？
   

3. following bysome ups and downs。这是没错哈，但是好口语话呀，上上下下的波动用fluctuation吧。。。

4. influctuate。这是啥。。。。？

5. had not dropped。别用完成时吧，你毕竟时在描述一个过去的客观事实，就用一般过去就好了，我们不特别强调影响的哇。

6. although the number of the latter presents a growing trend, the elder.这里的the elder从哪里冒出来的呀。。。去掉吧，句子意思很完整了呢。用过去时哈，都是以前发生的了。

楼主，你语法越来越好了哈，我都要比较刻意的去看，才能找出来。恭喜你｀｀｀｀

雅思作文，最重视文章结构，你的观点是最近的科技对生活的影响更大，那么把第二段和第三段换个位置，你要证明的观点要离你的结论最近。

不离题，文章结构正确，把每段关键局放在第一句或第二句，6分就有保障了。

小的错误要注意，楼上已指出不少，你可以用word来写，会自动提示错误的地方。

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雅思写作应注意一下几点：
1、注重写好文章的框架
我曾经问过我们世纪雅思的外教老师， 外国人看文章最注重的是什么， 他告诉我说是文章的framework. 即一篇文章好不好， 首先看的不是他的句型， 词汇， 或是论点等。 而是段落之间的衔接一定要十分清楚，我们不能老是采用大三段的形式-开头，经过， 结尾。我们可以多用用连接词， 例如：first of all, morever, secondly, lastly等，另外可以多分自然段， 给考官一目了然的感觉。还有我们可以多看看国外的文章， 看看他们的写作模式， 我当初写文章的时候， 用的就是我看到一篇国外文章的模式，我觉得可以套用， 我最后介绍给大家。
2、句型的多样化
如果一篇文章， 从头到尾， 永远用的只有一种句型， 那么这篇文章一定拿不到高分，我们可以适当的改换一下句型， 我给大家一定建议，希望给大家有点帮助。
3、基本句型包括 Ⅰ．主谓句；Ⅱ. There be；Ⅲ. 主系表结构的句子；Ⅳ. 被动语态（我看到一张帖字说， 不要用被动， 我不这样认为， 国外的文章， 用被动的也比比皆是。）
4、复杂句型 包括 Ⅰ. 并列句；Ⅱ. 从句（定语，状语，名词性，非谓语）
5．词汇的Variety
说实话做到这点真的很难， 首先你要有庞大的词汇量，第二你要用的恰当，不出错误。我自认做不到这点，所以我用的词汇有时候会重复。当然大家可以累计一些固定搭配的词汇，例如：激烈的竞争 fierce competition等
6、多举EXAMPLE（重要）
大家不要小看这点， 我认为对于写作基础不是很好的考生来说， 这点是最重要的。一篇文章如果让你从头到尾都在讲道理， 你有这么多话要说吗？而且有时候还不一定说的清楚。那么这时候你就用例子来表明你的观点。我认识一个朋友， 可以说她的英语基础很差， 但她的文章也拿了6分， 我问她怎么写的， 她告诉我说就是拼命的举例子。就这点我也曾问过外教老师， 他曾是IELTS的考官， 他说考官欢迎考生多举例子。
7、建议：
1）、写文章最关键的就是审题千万不要出错误， 不然就前功尽弃了。
2）例如我积累的句子：
Cultivate independence
Develop a strong sense of responsibility
Enhance social awareness
Build up one’s confidence and offer one’s a sense of achievement―realize ones value and capacity
Widen one’s horizon and sharp one’s character
这些句子比较常用， 而且在口语考试中也可以派上用处。最后给大家介绍一种写作模式，我觉得很不错：
With unprecedented advances in medical technology, a debate has developed over whether or not a person on life support has the right to die. On one side of the debate are those who say that...... On the other side is the view that...... In my mind, I completely agree/disagree the later .
There is no denying that ......has many positive effects. To begin with,......Secondly, ...... Finally, ......
However, every coin has its two sides. ......is no exception. Many opponents say that ......
To conclude, .....

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论据分析雅思写作真题
阅读真题和雅思写作不得不说的关系：论据篇。
Topic：TV
is an essential part of leisure activities in most families. However,
some parents decide not to have a TV set in their homes, in order that
their children will devote enough time to invention and creation. Do you
agree or disagree with this attitude?
开头段：介绍文章背景，随着科学技术的发展，电视对人们的影响越来越大。
As
science and technology accelerates, television, as a powerful
invention, is becoming incredibly popular in people's daily life. People
can be informed of the current affairs and appreciate the affluent
programs at home. It seems to me that television will not whittle
children's creativity as has been exaggerated.
主体段第一段：开始论述电视对小孩创造力的好处1，电视让小孩子们在家就能了解到世界上发生的事情，新的科技发展，这些都会激发孩子的创造力，给他们带来灵感。
To
begin with, television is an effective means to make children
acquainted with the latest news and enlightens them on the latest
scientific advancement. Television reveals the recent development of
some researches, such as the new computing technology, clone technology
and genetic breakthroughs, which can inspire the imagination of children
and motivate them to conduct relevant experiments, making new findings
and breakthroughs in their familiar fields.

主体段第二段：论述电视对小孩创造力的好处2，一些冒险片可以培养小孩子的创造力，地理历史片通常是很有启发性的，可以扩大小孩子的知识面，丰富人生的经历。

Moreover,
along with the emergence of information technology, the knowledge
presented in textbooks cannot cater for children's curiosity any longer.
Programs like adventures can cultivate children's creativity and the
ability to tackle difficulty. Some scientific, detective and documental
programs, like Discovery and National Geographic, are so enlightening
and fascinating that even little children can be absorbed in. Other
well-chosen programs can initiate teenagers' aspiration to know about
the nature and stimulate their interests in science and technology.
主体段第三段：论述看电视对孩子创造力带来的坏处，可能会让孩子习惯被动接受信息，而不是自己学会发现。而且有的电视节目要不然就是理解起来太复杂，要不然就是不够有趣，因此看电视并不是一个好的开发创造力的方法。
There
is suspicion in some parents' minds that TV might retard their
children's creative ability or restrain kids' imagination because TV
viewers tend to receive information in a passive way instead of
discovering things with their own hands. Although people in the TV
industry have made great efforts to develop various programs, the
outcome is not satisfactory: either the program is too profound to be
understood or the topic is not interesting to attract TV audiences.
Thus, watching TV is hardly a good way to inspire children's creativity.
In many cases, it can draw attention away from their studies and spoil
their school education.
主体段第四段：还有一些别的方法也可以用来刺激创造力，比如写作，想象和原型描述也可以激发新的想法。
There
are some other ways to stimulate children's creativity, such as
writing, visualizing and prototyping, which can boost the flow of new
ideas. Something as simple as writing deepens every individual's
engagement. This is why all those competitions on breakfast cereal
packets encourage us to write in saying good comments. The very act of
writing makes us more likely to believe it.（稍作修改，用在这里做论据）
主体段第五段：权威并不是抑制创新，但实际上却经常如此。错误的领导方式会导致团队成员倾向于选择不承担本应属于他们的责任。
Authority
does not have to inhibit innovation but it often does. The wrong kind
of parenting will lead to the regrettable tendency of children to opt
out of team responsibilities that are properly theirs.（稍作修改，用在这里做论据）
结尾段：总结上文，表达自己的观点，电视并不会对小孩的创造力有不利的影响。
In
a word, it is my strong belief that television will not impair
children's creativity as is asserted. Nevertheless, the government and
the whole society should exert to eliminate the unhealthy contents on TV
and ensure the children with a favorable growing environment.