雅思写作的基本问题

上海老师程莹在带写作,写作教久了发现,学生都在关注大气上档次的句子和单词,却忽略了写作文句子中基本的语法和句法,这些都直接导致分数，尤其是在Grammatical Range and Accuracy 那项打分不是很高。对于考官而言，考生得先把句子写对了，考官才不需要去猜测你的意思，才会比较顺畅的读下去，也就是这样才有可能拿到6分以上。程莹老师将学员经常犯的错误归纳如下：

1，sentence fragments(句子碎片)
如：The young people like to watch gun-fighting movies, they imitate them , they have a crime.
错误原因：逗号隔开的句子，没有连词
改写： Influenced by gun-fighting movies, young people are likely to watch imitate them , thus leading to a crime sometimes.
例如: The camel is an ugly animal, it has huge hump on its back.
这个就是属于句子碎片,逗号隔开两个完整的句子要是没有连接词,是不成逻辑的.虽然我们内在看出他们是有因果关系,但是必须要有明显的因果关系联词才可以.
如下几个改写方法:
The camel is an ugly animal which has a huge hump on the back.
The camel is an ugly animal; it has a huge hump on its back.
Due to the huge hump on the back, the camel looks ugly.

2, There be 句型
很多同学用there be 句型表示客观存在的有,但是却总是用错了,变成 there have
There have many reasons for that case.
改写: There are many reasons for that case.

3, 连词重复使用比如:also, as well, too, in addition, moreover.他们都表示同一个意思,在句子中使用其中一个就可以表达并列的意思.
Lacking of care from the parents, many teenagers choose to live out of home, moreover they are obsessed with the online games too.
这个句子读起来顺口,但是却是犯了语法错误,连词多余不利于大拿一个好的分数.
改写: Lacking of care from the parents, many teenagers choose to live out of home, moreover, they are obsessed with the online games.

同样还容易重复使用的连词是: Therefore, as a result, because, since, so and due to.他们也表达同一个含义,句子中使用任意一个都可以表达原因和结果的关系.
比如:Because the car contributed one third of total greenhouse gas emissions, so I support the idea that we should limit the use of cars.
因为所以看起来很顺畅,但是在英文却是不符合句法,计划留一个就可以.
The car contributed one third of total greenhouse gas emissions, so I support the idea that we should limit the use of cars.

以上是常见的错误,上海老师程莹希望学生引起注意,这类基本小错误是非常容易避免的，也能给考带来不一样的变化。